I REALLY WANT YOUR INPUT

IM000729.JPGIt’s time to get into the nitty-gritty and start writing my novel. I can’t use the excuse that I need to do more research because the little bit of research I still have left to do I can cover while I’m writing the book. I need to bite the bullet and put my words/thoughts into action on paper.

You can help me get started. I have written two openings. One starts the story at the very beginning. The other one picks up a little further into the story and then I’ll go back to how it all started. I would love to have your input on which one I should use.

Here we go. OPTION ONE:

Laurel looked at the clock, “9 AM on a Monday and I’m still in my pajamas.” Not having to get ready for work presented a strange emotion Laurel Martin hadn’t felt before. No longer did she need to dress professionally every day. She didn’t have to grab breakfast on the run nor decide what to pack for lunch anymore. She had no reason to get up and head out at the crack of dawn.

(I will then get into what Laurel did for a living and why she’s not doing it anymore)

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OPTION TWO:

Laurel and her daughter Darlene arrived at the Detroit International Airport.

“Are you sure you want to do this, mother?”

“I’m positive. I confess I’m nervous. I’ve never done anything like this before in my life, but I’m going.”

Luggage check-in went without a hitch. Darlene gave her mother a hug, then biting her lower lip, watched her go through security to board the plane. With boarding pass and passport in hand, Laurel headed to Gate 10A, leaving Darlene and all her emotional security behind. Appearing confident on the outside, Laurel’s heart pounded and her stomach was in knots. “What am I doing?” she thought. “It’s too late to turn back now.”

She boarded Delta flight DL 0619 and settled into her window seat. As the plane coasted to the runway she thought back on what led her to this moment, on a plane, ultimately bound for Kenya.

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I think I know which one I’ll use, but I want to have some unbiased opinions as to which option you think would grab a reader more. Option One would have them wondering what kind of job Laurel had and why doesn’t she have it anymore. Option Two would hook the reader into wondering what led Laurel to be on this plane heading to Kenya.

Either way I will show in the first chapter or two what her job was, why she no longer has it, and what made her decide to take a trip to Kenya, of all places.

I have some other scenes written for various parts of Laurel’s adventure. Now it’s time for me to get the story in order on paper and see where it will go.

Will you help me? Please comment on which opening I should use and why. I am looking for constructive comments and guidance from other writers. Maybe you are struggling with the same problem.  Possibly we can help each other.

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4 thoughts on “I REALLY WANT YOUR INPUT

  1. Sarah

    My initial thought is that I would go with number two. Many people will read the first page of a book and, if they haven’t been grabbed, pick up a different book instead. Two is more immediately interesting. Two also introduces more than one character – that grabs people more.

    On the other hand, what sort of book is this going to be? If it is going to be highly reflective and seek that sort of an audience, perhaps one would be better. But for most book types, I think two would be better.

    • Thank you Sarah for your comment. I am leaning toward option two as well. This is my first attempt at writing a novel and I welcome all suggestions.

  2. #2 – you have very lttle time to grab the readers attention and make them care. I’m a big fan of slowly revealing the background as it’s necessary while living the adventure with the character. Happy writing!

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